Online sponsorship proposal

[TougeLabs]

http://www.joe.durgle.com/

Online proposal anyone ?

its not finished but you get the idea.

[s13silvia_R]

very nice proposal, looks very professional.

[TougeLabs]

I think i may offer to actually do this for anyone that is interested. Or maybe building a not gay myspace that focuses on ppl that dont fu*k around...what do you guys think ?

[McRussellPants]

- Bonneville noone cares anymore
- Sponsors don't care how you want more people interested, they want a market.
-35R SR20 sounds like not gonna break many records.
- No Mention of Current Sponsors. Is Touge Labs one? Why the fuck should I care. No one wants to be the first to sponsor someone. WTF does the touge have to do with bonneville.
- Re Write everything. super 5th grader tune works for zilvia posts, not trying to get people to give you money.
- Page isn't big enough.
Bio page (kinda got that one)
Gallery
Calender
Links (Support current sponsors)
-Hurr Hurr Techno Jap font in the dumpster
-Braking vs Breaking, I'd pitch that out just for that.
-White Car, No pictures of car, bland.


Thats not a proposal thats a bio. I'd throw that in the dumpster if It were sent to me.

[Maxstyle]

Does anyone even sponsor anymore. The industry is hurting so bad right now that last thing they want is give stuff away. At my work, we need a letter proving that you are going to have an artical written on your car before we give stuff. At the end of the day, it's about who your friends with too.

[TougeLabs]

Originally Posted by McRussellPants

- Bonneville noone cares anymore
- Sponsors don't care how you want more people interested, they want a market.
-35R SR20 sounds like not gonna break many records.
- No Mention of Current Sponsors. Is Touge Labs one? Why the fuck should I care. No one wants to be the first to sponsor someone.
- Re Write everything. super 5th grader tune works for zilvia posts, not trying to get people to give you money.
- Page isn't big enough.
Bio page (kinda got that one)
Gallery
Calender
Links (Support current sponsors)
-Hurr Hurr Techno Jap font in the dumpster

Thats not a proposal thats a bio. I'd throw that in the dumpster if It were sent to me.

You need to read b4 you post...not finished sorry i dont have all the time in the world and my car is sponsored
But like i said i dont want to be mean so im saying this with a smile on my face...also you are right no one cares about bonneville and thats why im working on it...The turbo im running right now is not the turbo i will be running. also the sponsors will be listed soon ill get right on it.caugh caugh

[TougeLabs]

For those that care check out the proposal in like a hour...Ill have my sponsors up soon just need some time this isnt something that happens fast...The industry is hurting pretty bad your right but as of today rc engineering picked me up and you guys can check out the list of sponsors after your done making fun of me

[KiDyNomiTe]

Looks too fancy to please an old man with money... Only thing about things like this is I think most companys prefer paper proposals, gives them something to touch and hold, plus it is easy to pass around the office for others to view.

I guess it just depends on your target company. In the end it comes down to what you can offer...

[McRussellPants]

call me an asshole all you want.

Sponsorship is a business and if someone showed that shit to me with "please give me money" attached to it. I'd Laugh, and then link it to all my sponsor friends with "lol imho" attached to it.

You're basically cold calling people, they don't know you, they don't think "oh that joe dungle, hes a cool bro"

ps, edited for more shit I found.

[Maxstyle]

^ key words being what "YOU" can offer them.

[fliprayzin240sx]

I got a better idea...anything you have that your not using, you should give me so YOU can sponsor ME!!!

[TougeLabs]

Originally Posted by KiDyNomiTe

Looks too fancy to please an old man with money... Only thing about things like this is I think most companys prefer paper proposals, gives them something to touch and hold, plus it is easy to pass around the office for others to view.

I guess it just depends on your target company. In the end it comes down to what you can offer...

Your a 100% right that is why you can print the whole thing out as a PDF
Thank you and really good point...

[TougeLabs]

Originally Posted by fliprayzin240sx

I got a better idea...anything you have that your not using, you should give me so YOU can sponsor ME!!!

O stop you get way cooler wheels then i do lol

[TougeLabs]

i keep reading new stupid shit out of your mouth sorry Tougelabs is a small company i started up to help ppl out with sponsorships and getting to the next step...any other questions please feel free to pm me and not thread jack and put me down...

[ESmorz]

It's cool and all, but it looks like something I'd make in comp class...

Go simple, people with money looking to sponsor don't care about your html skills or presentation of a parts list. I would imagine they just want the cold hard facts.

[TougeLabs]

Originally Posted by ESmorz

It's cool and all, but it looks like something I'd make in comp class...

Go simple, people with money looking to sponsor don't care about your html skills or presentation of a parts list. I would imagine they just want the cold hard facts.

If you call a company up and they are some what interested they will ask you for all the info. that is listed on my proposal.

So they can make sure of a few diff things, first of all no conflicting companies.

Like i said guys not done yet. will look much better when i finish
was just throwing the idea out

[McRussellPants]

Originally Posted by TougeLabs

i keep reading new stupid shit out of your mouth sorry Tougelabs is a small company i started up to help ppl out with sponsorships and getting to the next step...any other questions please feel free to pm me and not thread jack and put me down...

dude, if thats the best you can do you don't need to help people with sponsorships.

I know from experience. I've told people to avoid better proposals than yours just for the "why does it matter" you haven't sold anything, I still don't care about what your doing and people with money will be more critical than I will.

As much as it hurts your feelings and you want to cry about it, Me and Kidynomite have posted the only decent help you've gotten in this thread.

I agree about mods list in the dumpster, it makes me care less because the only part that shows any thought into going to bonneville is the underpan, the rest just points to you want money for your street car.

[McRussellPants]

quick, to the point, give a calender to when people will see your car. Make the person reading it think that a sticker on your car will make people check out their product (yeah, I saw the line 'hurr hurr I'll sell your product" thats not good enough, nor what Im talking about)


inbeforeignoresmebecauseitsnotwhatyouwanttohear.

[TougeLabs]

i thanked you mcrussel wtf is your issue im kidding around. your really taking this to heart dude... I have had great success with the whole shitty proposal thing i agree with you i was just doing this for fun...Check your rep as soon as i read what you said i + 1 you cause you guys pointed out some things. Dont put ppl down and come across like a di*k and you would have less of an issue.

[TougeLabs]

No dude im not ignoring you
I listen to everyone cause everyone has something to offer.
Like i said i threw it together its not done.
As for the copy i am not a writer im an artist so yes i could use some help.
help a brother out !

[luftrofl]

Grammar+word usage > you. I'm not trying to be an ass, but you should proofread your writing or take an English class. It doesn't have to be perfect but you've made some big errors.

After reading your "about me" section, I couldn't tell what you were writing about. The title of this thread is "online sponsorship proposal" but you hardly mention it on the entire web page. There is literally only one sentence that even mentions the fact, albeit vaguely, that you're looking for sponsors.

Edit: my criticism is harsh, but fair. I hope you don't think I'm an asshole for this

[TougeLabs]

It was just some quick copy guys nothing is permanent i just figured i would post it up due to the idea not the copy and shit...and i dont thinkg your an asshole
Im not a writer by any means i took english cause i had to for my major lol
someone step up and help me out

[johngriff]

Going to college > Sponsorship.

Just think about it.

Sponsors are more about established friendships and business relationships than blind funding, unless you are maybe the top 16 in whatever you do.

And don't post asking for a critique on something, then tell everyone it wasn't finished when you posted it. Post AFTER you are finished.

[TougeLabs]

I posted the fact that it was not finished
sorry for jumping the gun
someone delete this and ill repost it in a day or two

[zaneithan]

wow dude totally OT but you are in 845 area code too? im only like an hour from you haha, nice to see other 240 owners with a passion to do something with them around here

[TougeLabs]

That i am OT as well as OG haha got some more of it finished up today
Need to write the copy over and finish the windows for the popups for the piks
But yea coming together

[StaticX27]

To give you a general idea, the Tomei sponsorship forms are something around 13 pages of documentation that you have to not only explain who you are, what you do, etc, but also how is this going to benefit their company? And unfortunately "Spreading around your name and making you look good" is not a good enough reason. Most companies already have a good enough source of marketing, not to mention they probably would rather print an article in Super Street, Turbo mag, etc rather than give you thousands in parts.

Not trying to knock you for trying this, but effectively, you're putting your resume online and hoping someone will call and offer you a job. Like McRussel said, you need to give these people something in their hands and say "here ya go, this is why you're an idiot for not sponsoring me" kind of feeling. When you're sponsor searching, think of it a lot like job hunting, except even harder.

[Ian]

It's hard for me to think that someone who is competitive in a professional series will have trouble getting sponsorships this way and you won't


that's all i'm saying

[TougeLabs]

Originally Posted by StaticX27

To give you a general idea, the Tomei sponsorship forms are something around 13 pages of documentation that you have to not only explain who you are, what you do, etc, but also how is this going to benefit their company? And unfortunately "Spreading around your name and making you look good" is not a good enough reason. Most companies already have a good enough source of marketing, not to mention they probably would rather print an article in Super Street, Turbo mag, etc rather than give you thousands in parts.

Not trying to knock you for trying this, but effectively, you're putting your resume online and hoping someone will call and offer you a job. Like McRussel said, you need to give these people something in their hands and say "here ya go, this is why you're an idiot for not sponsoring me" kind of feeling. When you're sponsor searching, think of it a lot like job hunting, except even harder.

And yes the garrett and Tial sponsor paper work was like 30 pages long. I dont expect that a company is going to stumble onto this but it is something extra to stand out and so far the companies that i deal with are loving the idea. I hope you guys check it out in a few days and give me more input this is something new and i have not seen anyone else with this so far. I think its a great idea for some of you guys... I guess ill be the test subject and we can really see if its worth it.

[TougeLabs]

Originally Posted by Ian

It's hard for me to think that someone who is competitive in a professional series will have trouble getting sponsorships this way and you won't


that's all i'm saying

Are you saying its a good idea lol or are you agreeing with everyone else saying that its a failure and a really dumb idea?